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May. 14th, 2009


The miscommunication of hearts

Now past and lost within an overlapping arch of time

That stops ticking, grinding to a halt

Every time you speak of me,

In the past, in the present,

Stopping time to sigh my name,

So shamefully broken

Never at ease,

Why please, for me

Put time back together

Whole and un-stolen

Life go’s on

For me, for you

Free flowing en route,

Toward the future,


Pausing time in one sorrowful moment of mute

Will not find me there


Like time, that I’d move on,

Forgive me,

And release time,

Move on,

As I have already gone

And leave us unspoken

Forever lost in time


( 17 comments — Leave a comment )
May. 14th, 2009 05:50 pm (UTC)
This is still not a writing community.
May. 14th, 2009 06:17 pm (UTC)
Wait. What?
May. 14th, 2009 07:45 pm (UTC)
Quoi? 0_o
May. 14th, 2009 08:04 pm (UTC)
Life go’s on

As does this poem, unfortunately.
May. 14th, 2009 09:02 pm (UTC)
I think you're mixed up - you reviewed books in your private journal & put a poem in a book review community?
May. 14th, 2009 10:03 pm (UTC)
Sorry, but this isn't the place to be posting your poetry.

May. 14th, 2009 11:54 pm (UTC)
This is the sort of reply which should have come first.

For most of the others who posted here, I think it's actually rather a lot more bookish to write poetry than it is to write dull and snide remarks.

As far as I can tell it's not explicitly stated that this is only a community for book reviews (I don't believe it is). Nor does it mention that DIY poetry is not welcome.
So a person made a mistake..

This, I think, is one of the better poems I have read here - though I can't say I understand it. It has a nice flow of words. It would do nicely as spoken word.
May. 15th, 2009 12:00 am (UTC)
Some people do make honest mistakes, like posting in the wrong commute or not quite understanding the purpose of it. I think because people are being snarky is because this has happened before and the poster did not take the hint (and was damn rude about it herself).

This is a community about book discussion, and not a writing commute to post one's work. I thought it was understood by the profile info and the name, but I guess some things just have to be spelled out sometimes.
May. 15th, 2009 09:45 am (UTC)
I'm not disputing that this is a community for discussion of books - though I think it is unclear.

What annoys me, is that as soon as someone posts something like this in here, a whole mob of dandy elitists come out of what they presume to be their own private club-house, and one after the other, *BAM*, hit the eject button-
All the while acting like they have been inconvenienced.. C'mon, doing this is the 'light of their life'.

There only needs to be one response and it doesn't need to be snide. I have seen this kind of response several times. It reeks of hypocrisy and I hope it is not truly representative of our community.

Besides, we ought to acknowledge the possibility that this poem is an Apology for the last poem (if there was one) that they posted here.

Nothin' wrong with conversin' in verse.

Anyhow, I commend you for your response electro ::)

May. 15th, 2009 01:42 pm (UTC)
It actually was an accident lol, I was unaware I had made it until all of this came up, sorry, won't happen again..... I signed up to this community to talk about and review books only. Thanks
May. 15th, 2009 12:03 am (UTC)
Depends on what kind of books you read. Personally, I joined this community to read reviews and learn about published or soon-to-be published works, not read someone's personal journal.
May. 15th, 2009 01:12 am (UTC)
I don't mind personal stories as long as they relate, somehow, to books or bookstores.
May. 15th, 2009 04:47 am (UTC)
Ok, fair point. I still don't think unpublished, random, online poetry relates to books or bookstores though.
May. 15th, 2009 03:34 pm (UTC)
Oh, totally agree. This was an inappropriate post was not defending it.
May. 15th, 2009 12:06 am (UTC)
Afraid, Like time, that I’d move on,

Time's not afraid of NOTHING, yo. Also, "time" is used EIGHT TIMES in a twenty six line poem.

May. 15th, 2009 01:54 pm (UTC)
Suckah free-"Time's not afriad of NOTHING, yo"
and your mocking me, herm, right........

Besides its afraid LIKE time that I'd move on. Not that time itself is afraid to move on, it has no choice lol

Anyway sorry... Friends?
May. 15th, 2009 09:32 pm (UTC)
I believe the only person who SHOULD be screening the content posted in this book community should be the person who created it. There's been other types of posts, besides this one, that have very little to do with book reviews, book recommendations, or literature in general. None of which have been deleted or reprimanded by the creator - as far as I know. And sense no rules have been posted for this little community regarding such definitions, it seems we're all going to have to live with the freedom of speech and freedom of press until otherwise.

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